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in margin: I am sending the M.S. photographs with this. succeeded in getting a friends article into any magazine. Have you
tried the Land of Sunshine? I have spent two days on your two articles. The one on Graybirds? is best. My criticism you will
learn by the changes I have proposed. All enclosed thus ( ) I would omit. Many of your paragraphs are too short. Avoid big
uncommon words; be sparing of superlatives, never interrupt narrative with long philosophical or sentimental digressions however
just. They should only be hinted or lightly touched in. But all this you will learn. What is your latest news of Mrs Carr
Ned promised to write but has failed to send a word. Last I heard she was at Paso Robles. Remember with kindest regards to
your father mother Lottie, with best wishes for your success, I am Cordially Yours John Muir